User talk:Empresstamar

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Ahoy - just some feedback about your pirate article Empresstamar. I can see you plan to write quite a bit, so hopefully I can catch you here before you get too far :P. Generally, it should follow the same format as other pirate articles (see these guidelines). :

  • Trophy spoilers and hearty lists - these should not be included
  • Advertising services - e.g. MAAing, this is better suited to the forums
  • The article should include encyclopedic content about the pirate - not the player behind the pirate! (e.g. most of the Romantic relationships section)
  • Third person - e.g. "Empresstamar is" rather than "I am"

To be honest, all of the above things are likely to be changed and/or removed from the article by editors in the future (except possibly third person, it's tricky to rewrite passages completely and preserve tone). Hopefully this feedback gives you a bit of time to make some changes that fit with the theme of your article. Sorry to be the bearer of bad news :/ aside from the guideline issues, I think it reads very well. --Therobotdude 06:11, 21 June 2014 (PDT)

Alright, I re-wrote the pre-existing sections in third-person. Additionally, I removed the blatant advertising, all mentions of trophies, hearty lists, and real life information. Hopefully it reads better? --Empresstamar 06:43, 21 June 2014 (PDT)