Talk:Mastermax
I have cleaned up the page, if I have not cleaned up what you wanted me to, please tell me what I do need to clean up. And if I have cleaned up what you wanted me to, please remove the little clean up box. - Mastermax
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Cleanup
Ahoy mate! Thanks for leaving me a message. I should be leaving this on a user page, but I am not sure who wrote me (probably 1000fast?) OK, lets get down to business. There are some little things that need to be rectified. The two most prominent issues are the infobox (no oceans listed), and standard named ships are being listed (against new policy, except if you name them in a narrative). I'll take care of that, they are minor details that can be fixed easily. The major problem would involve a revision of the biography. I am under the impression that the writer is not an English major (but neither am I!), since the text is not perfect. Focus on that. Finally, when you post a comment or leave a message, you should sign it by typing --~~~~, also done by pressing on the second icon from the right on top of the edit window. Cheers! --Arminius 20:23, 10 January 2007 (PST)
- OK, did what I said I would do and reformated the article a bit. All that needs to be taken care of is the biography section. --Arminius 20:32, 10 January 2007 (PST)
I have an example programing of the rewrite. I would like to know if this is okay before I put it up and erase what is already there. here is the example:
- This looks good. Still needs some grammar polishing. Put it on the main page, remove the cleanup tag. I'm sure somebody else or me will take another closer look. Fair winds! --Arminius 13:38, 14 January 2007 (PST)
Sample
Mastermax is the captain of the crew The Treasure Seekers and king of the flag Treasure Brigade on the Viridian Ocean.
Biography
The Beginning
Mastermax was born to be a pirate. It was in his blood. His first crew was named Ryujin Corsairs. In Mastermax's opinion is it was a very good crew. It had many friendly people such as Macgreggor, Freeze, Adamkaiser, Mergen, Wimpi and Manicmark. Mastermax stayed with the Ryujin Corsairs till he was promoted to pirate. Then, Mastermax went venturing to other crews so he could be an officer and get experience to be a captain. He had always wanted to be a captain and to help other people just like Macgreggor helped him.
Mastermax came back to Ryujin Corsairs when he could become an officer. Which was when Macgreggor lowered the experience requirement. Macgreggor had a huge amount of people lost from his crew and his flag had died. Mastermax left again when he had the experience and money (helped by his two good friends Krunch and Ho). As soon as he made his crew he started thinking of good friends to join him. He remembered a greenie Zajac whom he had recruited into Ryjin Corsairs when he was an officer. Zajac turned out to be really nice and they became great friends.
Ranking up
Mastermax worked hard for his crew. Although he wasn't as rich as the other captains, he earned his captain's badge and had enough for his clothes each month. Best of all he got to see Zajac, a greenie he met at the dock, turn into a great merchandising Senior Officer .
One day Mastermax was working for his crew by trying to get some more friendly people in it. He found a pirate named Monkfishdave. Mastermax offered Monkfishdave a position as an officer in The Treasure Seekers. Monkfishdave accepted. Mastermax took him for his officer's test. Monkfishdave did so well on his officer's test that the crew's rank went up enough to allow The Treasure Seekers to run a flag. A flag was made. Mastermax named it Treasure Brigade.
The bad times
Zajac and Mastermax aren't on the same crew now. They were together in The Treasure Seekers. Mastermax and Zajac had a fight. They were angry. Zajac and his sister, Krystynaz, left the crew and joined another friend's crew. Mastermax and Zajac are no longer in touch.
The boring times
Mastermax got interested in other games and didn't play puzzle pirates for awhile. Nothing had attracted his attention in Puzzle Pirates since Zajac left him. Mastermax was only a shadow in these times.
The happy but unknown times
Mastermax finally returned one day and decided to try to restore his crew. He asked all his hearties if they would like to join his crew. One person on his hearty list did join his crew. His name was Madad.
Madad had a great past with Mastermax. When Mastermax was searching for a crew where he could be an officer, he met Madad. Madad was nice and funny. Mastermax and Madad made great friends.
Mistressmimi joined this group of two, and they became the three M's. Mastermax invited them to be his roommates in his new bungalow. They both accepted. The M's decided they wanted to get more cool furniture for the bungalow, and they all worked together to get it. They pillaged together and shared money. Eventually, the three-roomed bungalow became crowded. Buying a cottage became a real need for the M's. Working together Mastermax, Mistressmimi, and Madad acquired a much roomier cottage.
Owns
- Mastermax's cottage on Sakejima Island
- Mastermax's bungalow on Dragon's Nest
- Mastermax's shack on Sakejima Island
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--1000fast 07:55, 13 January 2007 (PST)
