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What are the specific problems with my article right now?

== Page Cleanup Possibilities ==

First off as a disclaimer I was not the one to tag your pirates wiki page but after having read it here are my thoughts on what needs to be cleaned up.  

First This page is about Bernie a pirate and not about you personally so I woud start by removing all references to Phatbeard.  Bernie and Phat have no Y!PP conections with each other outside of you as a player.  You should creat seperate pages for them.  If you like you can use your account user page to list all your pirates and connect them together.  Outside of that pirate pages should be a biographical of the RPG character and not about the characters controler which Bernie's Page looks like.  Keep Berinie's page to being about Bernie.

Secondly your grammar while not bad is a little off.  I would try wording it in a way that would get a good grade in an english class at school.  Have someone read it for you and comment on it if you feel english is not your strongest subject.

Finally you could include also include a pirate infobox.  You can copy in the following code making appropriate name and item changes:

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<nowiki>{{Infobox pirate
|piratename= Bernie
|portrait= no

|galleries= 1
|ocean1= Sage
|ocean2= 

|trinket=no
|trinkettype=Greeting card|trinketcolor1=black|trinketcolor2=

|pet= yes
|pettype=Rat
|petname=Rat
|petcolor1=gray
|petcolor2=
}}</nowiki>

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Try making those changes and remove the cleanup tag.  If you make these changes I doubt that anyone will replace the cleanup tag.

Hope this helps and good luck maintaining your pirate's information on the wiki.--[[User:Kgarrett1969|Kgarrett1969]] 08:59, 20 September 2006 (PDT)

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Thank you dearly for your kind explanation. I will do my best to fix it. That infobox thing is pretty nifty. I copied it and edited it to my persoanl specifications.

== Preview Button ==

Ahoy again.  You pirate's page is looking much better.  There are still a few sentences that are oddly word that could use being fixed but I'm not going to place a cleanup box on it since you are obviously working hard to fix it.  One other thing though is that you should use the 'Show Preview' button when making changes to a page instead of hitting the 'Save page' button immediately.  This gives you a chance to look at your modification to sure everything looks the way you want it to.  This also avoids multiple edits being logged against your page which actually is how I found that you were updating it again.  It makes life easier on the site's volunteer editors not to have a dozen edits against the same page in a short period of time.  If you use preview to get everything tweaked around then when you hit save you'll only generate one edit to the log.  Again nice work on cleaning up your pirate's Wiki page.--[[User:Kgarrett1969|Kgarrett1969]] 10:43, 21 September 2006 (PDT)